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The graph gives information about the percentage of the population of four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020, with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about the percentage of the population of four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020, with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The graph provides data about the
population
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 of
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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,
Malaysia
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,Thailand and Indonesia. In 1970 and 2020, and the
prediction
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population
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 in 2030 and 2040. The data is given in
percentage
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percentages
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.
To begin
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 with,
Malaysia
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 and
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 had a significant
population
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 in 1970 with almost similar numbers (30
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percent
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per cent
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 for
Malaysia
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 and 5
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percent
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per cent
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 higher for
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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).
Then
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,
Malaysia
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 had the highest
number of
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apply
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percentages in 2020, with the prediction picked
to
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the highest
population
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 at almost 90
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percent
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per cent
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;
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 the
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Philippines
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Philippine's
Philippines'
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 figure dropped to the second least number after Thailand in the prediction years. Thailand is predicted with just under 50
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2040, in fact, in 1970,
this
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 country was the second least figure after
indonesia
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Indonesia
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 with around 13
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percent
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per cent
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population
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. It is surprising that Indonesia outraces two countries below it in 2040, the country is
the
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in the
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 second highest position (with 60
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percent
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per cent
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) after
Malaysia
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.
Overall
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. It is undeniable that a long time ago the four countries had few societies in their figures.
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, those countries had increased numbers of
population
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 in the period of time respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, philippines, malaysia, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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