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You were recently disrespected by one of the employees at your local supermarket.

#employees #supermarket
I hope
this
 letter finds you in radiant health and the best of spirits. I am writing
this
 letter with
crucial
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 purpose of complaining about I am bought your supermarket. I have brought various products to
this
 store. But your worker was rude to me. It is
distressing
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 situation for me. On the one side of the first and most important thing which should be mentioned is that, recently my birthday
for
this
 reason I want to buy a lot of fruits and meals. But your employees to replace my product.
However
this
 worker fruits
instead
 of vegetables. But
this
 vendor does not realise
this
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 meals.
For
this
 reason, I am writing
this
 letter. I hope You don't leave it like that
Finally
 having given the previous facts you will an immediate action in forward to hearing
from
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.you in the near future.
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