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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides data regarding the annual
production
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 of
milk
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 from four different countries, namely Netherlands, Australia, Tanzania and Guatemala in the years 1990, 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, the
production
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 of
milk
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 in all the countries except Australia experienced an upward trend,
whereas
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Austrialia
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Australia
 decreased over the given period of two decades.
Firstly
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,Tanzania and Guatemala
grown
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 their
milk
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production
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 from 87,000 and 26,000, respectively, in 1990 to 1,55,000 and 84,000 litres, respectively, in 2010. The least
milk
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 was in Guatemala throughout the period of twenty years.
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, the biggest proportionate increase was
also
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 seen in the same country as
the
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milk
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production
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 more than
doubles
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doubled
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 from 1990 to 2010.
Moreover
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, The Netherlands produced 11,262,000 litres of
milk
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 in 1990, but in 2000, the
production
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 fell slightly to 11,155,000 litres, but after that it picked up again and reached an
all time
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 high of 11,466,000.
Austrialia
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Australia
 was closely behind the Netherlands in the
production
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 of
milk
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 in 1990.
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, the amount of
milk
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 has dramatically
fell
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fallen
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 to 11,105,000 in
next
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the next
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 10 years, after which it sharply fell to its lowest point, about 9,165,000, in 2010.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 3 times.
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