The charts below show the proportion of people's total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1957 and in 2008.

The charts below show the proportion of people's total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1957 and in 2008.
The pie diagram above shows the
expenses
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structure of people in European countries
in
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for
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various products and services,
such
as housing, clothing, food, and
luxuary
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luxury
goods, etc.
The
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reporting period between 1957 and 2008,
overall
the
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clothing was the most
spending
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in 1957
whereas
in 2008
the
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housing was the highest. It can be seen that the structure had been changed dramatically over the reporting time.
Fristly
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Firstly
,
cloth
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clothes
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shopping which was the most
expense
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in 1957 had a significant decline from 32% to 12% in 2008. Meanwhile,
the own
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a house which was the largest share that people spent in 2008 had a
dramtically
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dramatic
increase from 22% in 1957 to 32% in 2008.
Similarly
, the food and
luxuary
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luxury
products which
were continue
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rieses
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rises
from 8% and 7% in 1957 to 17% and 17% respectively. All in all, the citizens tended to buy more durable goods and
daily
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dairy
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products than the others.
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