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Plactic bags, pastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by government and individuals to solve thisproblem?

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Plastics harms
environment
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due to
 its non-degradable nature. The consumption of
plastic
 has
been
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increased over the years, with the change
of
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in
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 human lifestyle.
However
,
the
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Scientists believe
plastic
 is a fantastic material which could be used for many developments
,
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 if the disposal mechanism is
well defined
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. In the present context,
plastic
 is mainly used as a material to produce bags,
bottles
 and packaging. The main adverse effect
from
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plastic
 is environmental pollution and health issues
to
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for
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human-being
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humans
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. To minimise these adverse consequences, both the government and individuals hold a greater responsibility.
Firstly
, looking into the adverse effects
to
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the
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nature, it is possible to consider the manufacturing process of
plastic
.
This
 causes
generation
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the generation
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 of fumes, which
pollutes
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pollute
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air
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the air
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.
Also
, some
plastic
 containers are specified for single use,
this
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which
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 creates
generation
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a generation
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 of non-degradable
waste
 in bigger volumes. Specially,
plastic
 packaging and
plastic
bottles
falls
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 into
this
 category.
The
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plastic
waste
 dumping on different sites leads to soil pollution and water pollution.
Secondly
,
plastic
 substances,
waste
 and irregular dumping of
plastic
has
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have
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resulted
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resulted in
resulted from
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 many critical
illneses
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illnesses
illness
such
and
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as
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 cancers.
Further
,
this
 leads to
increase
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of
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 mosquito breeding, causing many related diseases.
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Finally
, to mitigate these issues
govenments
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governments
government
 should develop new laws addressing these irregular practices, and develop a clear mechanism to monitor compliance.
This
 is mainly to encourage recycling of
plastic
 to minimise
waste
, and to have proper controls in the manufacturing process.For
an
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example, in Sri
Lanka
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Lanka,
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 the Environmental Authority
ctitically
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critically
 evaluates factory processes to minimise
adverse
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the adverse
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effect
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effects
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to
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on
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environment
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the environment
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. As citizens of a country, each individual shall
dispose
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dispose of
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 their
plastic
waste
 in an
environmentaly
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environmentally
 friendly manner.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, the usage of
plastic
 needs to be minimised by moving towards more natural products and alternatives.
For example
, people can start using glass
bottles
instead
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of plastic
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bottles
, replacing packaging with recycled paper. In conclusion,
plastic
 has become a harmful material
due to
 irregular practices and
significant
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a significant
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 increase in usage.
This
 has caused environmental
pollutiona
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pollution
 and health issues for human life. To arrest these drawbacks,
government
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the government
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 and individuals
has
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 a greater role to play
to ensure
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in ensuring
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better
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a better
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 tomorrow.
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