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Some people believe that the media is responsible for violence in society. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #media #violence #society
1.
Logic
 behind the code The
logic
 behind the code appears to be that I assigned
firstly
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apply
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an
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a
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 starting
address
 to
HL
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the HL
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pair
according to
 the given
instruction
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. The
Accumulator
 reads the number passing the memory
accordingly
. After incrementing
HL
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the HL
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pair
address
, each time
accumulator
 compares the memory value (which comes after the
accumulator
 because of
HL
pair
address
incremented
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). Following
logic
 is
checking
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 process, which indicates that if
accumulator
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 is less than
current
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 memory value,
then
noswap
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the noswap
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 label launches,
else
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it continues swapping. After the inner label, E and D decrease simultaneously so that
previous
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 swapped numbers align
according to
 ascending sort. The most important point is fetching the
address
 of
HL
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pair
 to the starting point each time in the outer loop. 2. How did you come up with
this
 solution?
Initially
, I looked through and comprehended the syntax within the slide.
Moreover
, Sorting
the numbers
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the logic of the numbers
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logic
, resembled
me
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apply
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the C++ algorithm. After the comprehension of the syntax, it is straightforward for me to overcome the problem. 3. Is there
more
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 optimal way to do that? I think there are disparate ways to make ascending sort. 4. Which
group
 of instructions you mainly applied? Basically, I applied 3 types of instructions, including
Data
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a Data
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 Transfer
Group
,
Logical
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a Logical
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Group
, and
Branch
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 Control
Group
.
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