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The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

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The supplied table gives data on
underground
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the underground
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railway
system
 in six metropolitan cities namely:
London
, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kyoto and Los Angeles. As is observed,
London
Correct article usage
the London
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railway
system
 is the oldest among
six
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the six
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 and has the longest rail
route
 and the most recent
railway
system
 in Los Angeles
having
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has
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 a small
route
 and fewer passengers
using
Wrong verb form
use
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 the
railway
system
 each
year
.
London
railway
system
 was opened in 1863 and has a total of 394
km
.
route
. Paris
railway
system
 was started in 1900 and has 199
km
.
route
 but has a far larger passenger (1191 million per
year
) than the
London
railway
 (775 million passengers per
year
). Again, Tokyo
railway
 has the largest
passengers
Correct quantifier usage
number of passengers
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 using the
system
 and
this
railway
 station was started in the
year
 1927.
Two
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The two
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 most recent
railway
 stations are Kyoto and Los Angeles
those
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apply
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started in the
year
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years
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 1981 and 2001 consecutively and have 11 and 28
km
. of routes only. The 11
km
.
route
 of Kyoto
railway
 station is the smallest
route
 among the mentioned six cities.
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