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Band 4.5

You are going to study in a college in the UK next year. You would like to stay in a college Hall of Residence. Write a letter to the college. In your letter explain your accommodation requirements explain what your food needs are ask what alternatives are available if they cannot provide what you want You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in regard to my
accomodation
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accommodation
 for next year at the Royal College of London. I am considering staying at your Hall of Residence,
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, I would like you to resolve some of my doubts before formally arranging a room. First of all, I would like to stay in a single room with an ensuite bathroom. I understand
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 type of
accomadation
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accommodation
 may be more expensive but I am willing to pay more for it. As I have seen
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in
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 the webpage, there is a cafeteria in the residence that provides
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with
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three meals a day. Unfortunately, I cannot consume gluten, so I wonder if there are gluten-free options. I understand you may not be able to meet all my needs. That being the case, are there any other
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 alternatives provided by the college? Thank you for your attention and consideration. Yours faithfully, Sara.

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task achievement
Provide a clear and concise introduction that clearly states the purpose of the letter.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas into paragraphs to improve coherence and readability.
coherence cohesion
Use a more formal and appropriate greeting and closing for a formal letter.
coherence cohesion
Stick to the main topic and avoid unnecessary details.
grammatical range and accuracy
Demonstrate a higher level of grammatical accuracy by paying attention to sentence structure and word choice.
task achievement
Develop your ideas further by providing more details and explanations.
lexical resource
Ensure that you are using appropriate and specific vocabulary to accurately convey your message.
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