The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland from 1960 to 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below.

The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland from 1960 to 2000.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below.
The line chart gives information about the number of citizens smoked per 1000
people
in Someland over the period of 40 years between 1960 and 2000. It is evident that there was an upward trend in the women’s smoking rate,
whereas
the number of men decreased significantly. In 1960, the rate of males smoking in Someland was six times higher than that of females, at 600 men,
hence
100 women. After 15 years, the figure for female smokers saw some fluctuations;
however
, it sharply rose to 300
people
. The opposite trend can be seen when we look at the male rates of smoking, which gradually dropped to 500
people
during the same period of time. The rates of men
smoked
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continued decreasing until reaching its lowest point
at the end
of the period, at 250
people
, which was still higher than
women
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women's
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rates
about
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of about
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50
people
. The number of females remained unchanged until 1985,
then
it slightly went down to 200
people
.
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