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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of world.
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The Pie charts present the proportion of
water
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 used for three different purposes in six areas of
world
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.
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, more percentage of
water
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 was used for industrial needs in North
America
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 and Europe. In
case
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 of South
America
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, Central
Asia
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, Africa, and South East
Asia
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 maximum usage of
water
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 was for agricultural
purpose
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purposes
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. In North
America
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, around about 50% of
water
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 was used for Industrials applications,
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in
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case
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 of Europe where 53% of total
water
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 was used for the same purpose and it is
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 the
higest
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highest
proportions
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proportion
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 of
water
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 used for
this
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 cause in all
given
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 regions. Domestic usage was
higest
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highest
, 19% in South
America
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 and lowest, 7% in Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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. The
water
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 used for crops in South
America
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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, and South East
Asia
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 was 71%, 84%, 88%, and 81%, respectively. The
higest
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highest
 percentage for watering the crops in Central Asi,
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 only 12% of
total
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 was utilized for other purposes.
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 trend was almost
same
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 in
case
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 of Africa and South East
Asia
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, in these countries only 16 to 19%
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water
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 was utilized for other causes, all remained for crops.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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