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The chart below shows the number of Internet users in three different countries and the world average between 1998 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of Internet users in three different countries and the world average between 1998 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the
number
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 of
people
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 in thousands using
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Internet
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the Internet
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 in
Greece
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,
Denmark
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,
Canada
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 and the
world
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 average
Internet
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users
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 from 1998 to 2013.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the
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apply
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most
of
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people
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 in
Greece
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,
Denmark
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,
Canada
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 and the average
Internet
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users
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 increased in the whole period.
Additionally
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, the
Internet
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users
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 of
Denmarl
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Denmark
 peaked
the
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as the
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 top
users
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 in the
world
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. From 1998 to 2003, the
people
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 using
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Internet
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the Internet
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 in
Greece
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 rose from 4.000 to 24.000
people
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, respectively.
Besides
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, the
number
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 of
Internet
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users
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 in
Denmark
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 increased significantly by 54.000
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,
with
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 24.000
people
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 in 1998 to 78.000
people
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 in 2003.
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, there was an increase
rapidly
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in
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Internet
users
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 of
Canada
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, which stood at 28.000
people
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 in 1998 to 70.000
people
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 in 2003. The average
people
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 using
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Internet
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the Internet
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 in the
world
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 stood at 5.000
people
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 in 1998, after that,
this
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 figure increased by 7.000
people
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 in 2003. The
Internet
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users
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 of
Greece
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 in 2008 stood at 42.000
people
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. In 2013,
this
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 figure stood at 62.000
people
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, 20.000
people
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 higher compared with that of 2008. There
were
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 an increase in the
number
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 of
Internet
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users
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of
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in
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Denmark
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 and
Canada
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 between 2008 to 2013 by 10.000
people
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. Particularly, the figure of
people
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the Inetnet
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Inetnet
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Internet
 in
Denmark
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 stood at 88.000
people
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 in 2008 to 98.000
people
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 in 2013.
Besides
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, the
number
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 of
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users
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 in
Canada
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 peaked at 78.000
people
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 to 88.000
people
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 in 2008 and 2014, respectively.
Finally
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, there was a
slightly
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 increase
of
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in
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 the average
Internet
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users
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 in the
world
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 stood at 22.000
people
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 to 35.000
people
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in
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from
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 2008 to 2013.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "besides".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, internet, greece, denmark, canada, world, users with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Internet penetration
  • Trend
  • Growth rate
  • Increase/decrease
  • Comparative analysis
  • Significant
  • Average
  • Fluctuation
  • Plateau
  • Surge
  • Spike
  • Decline
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