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Some experts believe that when a country is already rich, any additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens any more satisfied. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

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Some experts believe that when a
country
 is already rich, any additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens
anymore
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 satisfied. In general, there are a lot of
transforms
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transformations
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 in citizens ' lives. We may have more crimes and
cue-side
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crime scenes
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 all over the town.
Firstly
 , all world
people
has
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a
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different life and properties than other.
This
 could affect poor
people
for
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 having water, food,
cloth
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clothes
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, education and
more
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other important essentials.
Secondly
, there will be more homeless
for example
 in the USA some youth just live in
there
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their
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 own car,
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in
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the
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this
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 reason, they do not have enough money to buy
the
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 house,
however
, they just buy
the
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a
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 car and
ran
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 out of money. So they just go anywhere they like, sleep in
there
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 car and do not have any home.
While
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,
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 poor
people
 cannot do anything because there
changes
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 just for rich
people
 and there will be more poor
people
 than past.
On the other hand
, some
people
 think the opposite. They think that they might afford their own money. The reason is that there can be
a bad financial conditions
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a bad financial condition
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 in the
country
.
People
 in that
country
 should be satisfied
about
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with
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 any changes by the government or any additional increase for the economiceconomis wealth. Citizens think that
there
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their
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country
 is
alreadycountry
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already country
 already rich, so any additional increase just be
the
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leftover for them.
Overall
, a lot of changes are being right now and the
changed
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about
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in
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 the social level of
rich
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the rich
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 and poor will be more clear than ever.
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