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The charts illustrate the number of people affected by four types of noise pollution day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007. Summarize and make comparison where relevant.

The charts illustrate the number of people affected by four types of noise pollution day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007. Summarize and make comparison where relevant.
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The charts give data about the
number
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 of people affected by four types of noise pollution
day
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 and
night
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 in
cities
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 and rural
areas
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 in 2007. As can be seen, the
number
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 of individuals who were affected by traffic pollution is the highest in both
cities
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 and rural
areas
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, in
cities
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 there are more or less 60
million
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 humans who were affected during the
day
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, and at
night
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 their
number
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 was less than 50
million
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,
however
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, in rural
areas
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 their
number
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 is roughly 33
million
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 people in a
day
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 and approximately 22 at
night
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. The lowest
number
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 of people affected by noise pollution was industry, in
cities
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 in a
day
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 it was roughly 1
million
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, and at
night
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 the
number
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 of human beings was almost invisible it was less than 1
million
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, in rural
areas
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 no one was affected by the industry at both
time
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times
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 during a
day
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 and at
night
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 92%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, day, night, cities, areas, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrate
  • number of people
  • affected by
  • types of noise pollution
  • cities
  • rural areas
  • comparison
  • relevant
  • daytime
  • nighttime
  • summarize
  • main findings
  • conclusion
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