Some people think that it is beneficial for children to do paid work, while others think that it can be harmful for children. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some societies believe there are benefits for

children

to do paid jobs, and others think that can be deleterious for underage. Despite the badness for the

children

, I strongly recommend the former and the reasons for

this

will be covered in

this

essay. On the one hand, in the

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21st century, parenting methods more improved by teaching

children

to get more experience and have soft skills. One of them is having experience with a paid appointment.

Firstly

, by implying that, the offspring would get more experience,

for example

, acting as cashiers, delivery persons, or waiters. They can explore their soft skills like

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world, interacting and communicating with others, and struggle and learn with their

job

. More than that, they would distracted from gadgets. Data from the Ministry of Empowerment of Women and

Children

, that nowadays, 70% or even more, most of

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would

spending

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their time in front of

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gadgets and social media without learning something from

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them

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. They just scroll and take too much information which is unnecessary.

On the other hand

, I would argue that

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job

will always

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for

under

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those under

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age. Sometimes, if they are too hectic

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the

job

, they

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forget to do their assignments. As we know, the obligation of the

children

is

study

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and do their homework.

For instance

,

a

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children

act as

waiter

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waiters

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, they will busy

handled

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handle

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the customer at the same time they would communicate with

other waiter

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another waiter

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,

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or

worker

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workers

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at the restaurant. They must be

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overwhelmed and tired. After work, they don’t have any time or energy to do their task.

To conclude

, based on the aforementioned reasons

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, I believe there are more merits effects for the

children

who do a paid

job

instead

of the

deleterious

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deleterious ones

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. The future of the

children

who take a paid

job

might be sustained in

this

21st century.