it is important for children to kearn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. punishment is necessary to help them kearn this dictinction. To what extent do to agree or disagree with this opinion? what short of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to yse to teach good behaviour to children?

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In recent times, with the help of technology individuals do their
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without meeting any citizens. In my opinion,
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development rather than
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can do multiple tasks and avoid contact with other
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which can save them lots of time, money as well and effort.
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in future.
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, there are many types of
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in which individuals need help from other human beings like government
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, daily life
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, shopping and many more.
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require time management and priority of
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will be easily achieved with the help of their own
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, the public is more aware of any kind of fraud happening in their life
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, by doing some extra
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activities for which they do not have any guidance or proper
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everything about banking and a particular
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of shop owners
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the quality of the product and
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do not require to do
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type of task themselves. Eventually, they become indolent and
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perform in their
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. To give an overview, citizens should do their daily tasks, shopping and some business-related
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and many more independence without any
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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