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Some people say that modern technology has made life too complicated and solution is for everyone to live a simple life and avoid using technology.Do you agree or disagree?

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It is universally accepted that
technology
 has a crucial impact on our lives. These days
technology
 effects are one of the most important issues. The following paragraph discusses whether it is beneficial or destructive and reaches a reasonable conclusion. Many support the view that new
technology
,
main
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 improvements
on
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 AI can cause unemployment problems in the future. It seems to me that it cannot be a reason to lose your job if you use a new
technology
 to work with it. In spite of the fact that, for scientists, using
technology
 efficiently is not a big problem as we assume. Because
,
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 it can expose new job opportunities
whereas
 AI is improving.
Secondly
, wars, nuclear and radiological guns are produced by abusing improvements
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technology
. For that reason, many people believe that
technology
 must be controlled by local authorities to prevent killing people during fights.
Overall
, it is seen that the advent of disruptive technological achievements might be the reason for increasing wars,
weapons
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, but not
losing
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 jobs. In a word, even if they seem appealing
for
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 us, they must be refined for humanity.
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