Wealth does not necessarily guarantee happiness. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
it is well known that to be rich does not give you
guarantee
for living Correct article usage
a guarantee
happy
life. there are many arguments about Add an article
a happy
this
issue. this
essay will discuss both opinions.
in this
life most people
think they become happy,
if they will gain lots of Remove the comma
apply
money
. that
is why most Capitalize word
That
of
Change preposition
apply
people
always try to work hard and to come Change preposition
to higer
higer
positions where they can be rich. they think that it will open new chances for them where it will make them happy. Correct your spelling
higher
however
it does not always finish with Add a comma
however,
happy
ending. Add an article
a happy
for example
, I have seen so many people
who never think about money
and financial expences
but they have heavy health problems. you can buy material things with Correct your spelling
expenses
money
but health is so important thing despite spending much
Correct quantifier usage
apply
money
sometimes it is beyond the reach of people
.
on the other hand
, parents should explain to their children
from childhoon
that Correct your spelling
childhood
value
of happiness does not depend on Correct article usage
the value
money
. that
is why they should not purchase everything for them including toys and clothes. Capitalize word
That
moreover
, they should teach how kids can manage money
from early
years of school. Correct article usage
the early
for example
, one time I read one of the billioner
famous Correct your spelling
billionaire
billions
american
Change the capitalization
American
businessman
who talked about their Change to a plural noun
businessmen
children
. it was saying that he made his children
work from school years in summertime. his children
worked in fast food restaraunt
and gained their first Correct your spelling
restaurants
money
. he claimed that after first
salary they understood Correct pronoun usage
their first
value
of Add an article
the value
money
.
in conclusion, i
think that Change the capitalization
I
people
should not depend on money
. if they want they can make themselves hap[py in several ways.Submitted by arzu.shahbazova1 on
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