Wealth does not necessarily guarantee happiness. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

it is well known that to be rich does not give you
guarantee
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for living
happy
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a happy
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life. there are many arguments about
this
issue.
this
essay will discuss both opinions.  in
this
life most
people
think they become happy
,
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if they will gain lots of
money
.
that
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is why most
of
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people
always try to work hard and to come
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to higer
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higer
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higher
positions where they can be rich. they think that it will open new chances for them where it will make them happy.
however
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it does not always finish with
happy
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a happy
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ending.
for example
, I have seen so many
people
who never think about
money
and financial
expences
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expenses
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but they have heavy health problems. you can buy material things with
money
but health is so important thing despite spending
much
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money
sometimes it is beyond the reach of
people
.
on the other hand
, parents should explain to their
children
from
childhoon
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childhood
that
value
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the value
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of happiness does not depend on
money
.
that
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is why they should not purchase everything for them including toys and clothes.
moreover
, they should teach how kids can manage
money
from
early
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the early
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years of school.
for example
, one time I read one of the
billioner
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billionaire
billions
famous
american
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businessman
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who talked about their
children
. it was saying that he made his
children
work from school years in summertime. his
children
worked in fast food
restaraunt
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restaurants
and gained their first
money
. he claimed that after
first
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their first
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salary they understood
value
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the value
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of
money
. in conclusion,
i
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think that
people
should not depend on
money
. if they want they can make themselves hap[py in several ways.
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