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One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you yhink the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
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contemporary
 era, technological advancement brings the bright side in the medical aspects, as
due to
 improved medical facilities life
expectency
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expectancy
 of individuals are increasing and
people
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 to live longer
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compared
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 to
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, which is
positive
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 improvement.
However
, it
also
 has some drawbacks. In my opinion,
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 outweigh the demerits.
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discuss
 both the views in ensuing paragraphs. To commence with, it is an inevitable fact that medical systems nowadays are far better than
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 era.
Due to
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 in
technology
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technology,
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people
 can easily get
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from
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 any kind of
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such
 as
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cancer,
tumors
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, etc.
Besides
, it
also
heps
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 individual to work
untill
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until
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 age to keep their selves active and
illness free
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.
For instance
, in developed
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people
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 of 60 and they are fit as a fiddle
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which
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 them to become independent
along with
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 life. Turning to the other side of the spectrum,
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increasing life expectancy
 leads to one disadvantage.
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,
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 investigation shows that with an increased number of
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people
 we will soon witness dramatic issues
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poverty and lack of enough resources to live. In conclusion, to
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reiterate
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new means of medical treatment to the citizens of
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certain country will boost the satisfactory rate of
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.
However
,we can not deny the fact that welfare of the society will decrease unless
government
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 take steps towards
this
 issue. All in
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 pros
assiociated
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associated
 with
this
 subject outweigh the cons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • longevity
  • life expectancy
  • demographic shifts
  • elderly
  • wisdom
  • ageing population
  • healthcare system
  • pensions
  • mentorship
  • innovation
  • assistive technologies
  • cultural dynamics
  • family structures
  • medical advancements
  • quality of life
  • economic sustainability
  • dependency ratio
  • social contributions
  • volunteerism
  • preventative measures
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