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Some people think that going to a fitness centare regularly is unnecssary. Instead they believe the combining occasional exrcise(such as going for walk) with a balanced diet is enough to stay healthy. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Many
people
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 believe that going to a gym on a regular basis is not enough to stay healthy. They think that it would be more useful to
consolidate
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continue
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 doing sports and keeping a wholesome diet. I tend to support
an
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the
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 opinion that it is essential to play sports.
However
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, eating normally is needed too.
To begin
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 with, it is very important to exercise and to consume
food
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 full of nutrients.
Firstly
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, if a person would like to keep fit,
for example
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, they should always eat healthy products. The science proves
of
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apply
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it. Exercising
are
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is
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 not
so
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as
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 beneficial as it could be with keeping a balanced diet.
Secondly
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,
people
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's bodies need
vitamins
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 which can be collected from
food
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.
Thus
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, a person should strive to consume healthy products and all doctors recommend
to do
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doing
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 it.
Therefore
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, if
people
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 try to save their health, they do not have to combine these two significant factors.
On the other hand
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,
people
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 have an opportunity
of eating
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to eat
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 various
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food
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foods
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 but
collecting
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collect
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 useful substances,
for instance
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, proteins, fats, and carbohydrates, from
vitamins
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. Nowadays there are a lot of
vitamins
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 which can be bought at a
farmacy
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farm
 so it is not needed to always eat only healthy
food
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.
Hovewer
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However
,
people
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 should not
to
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apply
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forget about
vitamins
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 if they do not have a chance to eat
food
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 full of nutrients. In conclusion, I tend to think that going to a fitness
center
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centre
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 should be combined with taking a balanced diet to stay healthy but each person
choose
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chooses
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 the best option for themselves.
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