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the tables below give information about sales of fairtraide labelled bananas and coffee

the tables below give information about sales of fairtraide labelled bananas and coffee
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The tables compare data
of
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sale
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sales
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 of a distinct type of
bananas
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 and
coffee
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 in 1999 and 2004.
Overall
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, the largest amount of
bananas
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 and
coffee
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 were sold in the
UK
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,
whereas
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 in other countries sales weren't going so well.
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, all of the countries experienced
increase
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 in trade during the years.
To begin
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, in 1999, in the
UK
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, only 1,5
millions
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million
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of
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euros were spent
for
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on
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Coffee
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, followed by Switzerland (3
millions
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) and Denmark ( 1 million).
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, in 2004, in the
UK
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, the figure reached the amount of 20 million, representing the highest figure in
coffee
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 income during the
years
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year
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. Only, the number indicated Sweden sales was only 0,8, accounting for the lowest number in the table. Looking at
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the bananas
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bananas
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banana
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 trade,in 1999, in the
UK
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 the expenditure on
bananas
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 was 15
millions
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,
while
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The
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Belgium and Sweden, the number was only 1,8 and 2, respectively.
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, in the
UK
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, the best trade
occured
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occurred
 in 2004 (47 million), illustrating that both
bananas
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 and
coffee
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 had the highest rates in
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this
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that
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 year.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bananas, coffee, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sales figures
  • Fairtrade labeled
  • bananas
  • coffee
  • time period
  • trends
  • influence
  • consumers
  • farmers
  • communities
  • increase
  • products
  • labelling
  • sustainable
  • ethically sourced
  • global market
  • demand
  • awareness
  • certification
  • marketing strategies
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