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The graph provides information about growing trends of domestic access to modern technology in the UK.

The graph provides information about growing trends of domestic access to modern technology in the UK.
The graph provides information about growing trends
of
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 domestic
access
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 to modern
technology
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 in the UK. It is noticeable that there is
the
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 steady increase
for
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the
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access
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 to all
kindes
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kinds
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 of modern
technology
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 in the UK.The most
accessely
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accessible
accessed
technology
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 for
evebody
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everybody
 was and
staies
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states
stays
 during all period - the CD player. The worst spread has the internet
access
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, but we need to pay attention to the
fatc
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fact
 that
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internet
access
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 is the
yongest
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youngest
technology
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 from the list but it already has managed to
doubeld
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double
doubled
 its
access
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 in the homes.
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According
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two
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others
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 technologies, both of them are showing
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significantly
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 rise
of
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the
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access
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. And if in the beginning of the notes period the Home computer was more
accessely
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accessible
accessed
, in the
midle
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middle
 of
survey
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the survey
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 it lost its position and the mobile phone
technology
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 overtook it.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words access, technology with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provides" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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