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The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the total spending on three different categories by
the
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Great Britain of different
age
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group
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groups
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people
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 in 2004. Upon reviewing the chart, it can be observed that the
hightest
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highest
 proportion of money was spent on buying food and drinks products, and
this
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 expenditure increased steadily with
age
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 groups, starting from approximately 7 per
cent
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 for individuals under 30 and reaching nearly 23 per
cent
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 for those aged 76 and above.
According to
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spent
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 a significant amount of money on
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and
hotel
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hotels
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category
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categories
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.
Furthermore
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,
people
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 in the
age
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group
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 of 31 to 45 and 45 to 60 had almost similar
expenditure
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expenditures
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on
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in
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 the same category,
whereas
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 there was a huge difference between the
age
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group
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 of under 30 to 60 and 61 to 75 years old
british
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British
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people
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, elderly
people
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 of
age
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group
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 61 to 75 spent only 2 per
cent
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 on restaurants and hotels.
On the other hand
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, same as
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the food
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food
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the food
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 and drink category, expenditure on entertainment had a significant increase with
age
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 groups, starting from nearly 7
percent
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per cent
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 for youngsters and reaching roughly 23 per
cent
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 for those aged 76 and above.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group, people, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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