The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line chart provides information about the percentage of four southeast
asian
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Asian
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countries'
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countries
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(
Philippines
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,
Malaysia
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,
Thailand
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, and
Indonesia
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)
population
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that lived in urban
area
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areas
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from
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the total
population
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from 1970 to 2020,
along with
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its prediction for the next 20 years.
Overall
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, from the beginning
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the
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until 2020, all listed
countries
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except the
Philippines
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experienced a gradual
increased
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. e. It is predicted that all counties will increase gradually in
cities
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population
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. At the beginning of the period, the percentage of people who lived in
cities
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in the four
countries
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started in different
number
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numbers
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with
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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and
Malaysia
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around
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30%
while
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Thailand
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and
Indonesia
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bellow
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below
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20%.In the next five decades, city
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population
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populations
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in
Malaysia
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,
Thailand
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, and
Indonesia
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were
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gradually increased and reached around 80%, 30%, and 50% respectively in 2020.
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,
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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is the most unstable one and hit its peak in 1999 with around 50% city
population
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.
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the end, all
countries
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is
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projected to have a gradual increase in city
population
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until 2040.
Malaysia
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will be on the top of the pyramid with over 80%
people
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of people
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living in
cities
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.
Indonesia
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which
were
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started at the lowest will be
in
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the second
of
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the list with around 60%
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of citizen
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citizen
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citizens
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.
Thailand
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and
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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will be
on
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the
least
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last
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two with total people
live
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living
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in
cities
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with slightly over 50% and 40% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, philippines, malaysia, thailand, indonesia, population, cities with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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