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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify two serious ones and suggest ways that the government and individuals can tackle these problems.

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One
 of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that people do not pay attention to problems in some big cities. It is undeniable that pollution and unemployment are
one
 of the huge challenges.
However
,
this
 day possible to solve
this
 problem.
One
 of the main aspects of pollution provided by people's self. The
reasons
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 for
this
,
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 is that the public does not understand how they came
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cause
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 of
this
 goal. Environments should secure more extra bins in public places and raise
a
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 number of staff because
of
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there are big places to clean and less count of employees.
Furthermore
, there is
also
one
 large problem unemployment.
Causes
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 of them are big cities have a high level of community and low working place.
This
 could lead to immigration or might result in a decrease in education.
For example
, Russia the biggest country in the world does not have
this
 kind of problem. Because they cater extra bins in more places,
also
 gives all people job. Having everything mentioned , I come to
conclusion
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 that management needs to more care about joblessness to solve problems like pollution.
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