Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify two serious ones and suggest ways that the government and individuals can tackle these problems.

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of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that people do not pay attention to problems in some big cities. It is undeniable that pollution and unemployment are
one
of the huge challenges.
However
,
this
day possible to solve
this
problem.
One
of the main aspects of pollution provided by people's self. The
reasons
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,
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is that the public does not understand how they came
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cause
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of
this
goal. Environments should secure more extra bins in public places and raise
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there are big places to clean and less count of employees.
Furthermore
, there is
also
one
large problem unemployment.
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of them are big cities have a high level of community and low working place.
This
could lead to immigration or might result in a decrease in education.
For example
, Russia the biggest country in the world does not have
this
kind of problem. Because they cater extra bins in more places,
also
gives all people job. Having everything mentioned , I come to
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that management needs to more care about joblessness to solve problems like pollution.
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