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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify two serious ones and suggest ways that the government and individuals can tackle these problems.

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 of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that people do not pay attention to problems in some big cities. It is undeniable that pollution and unemployment are
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 of the huge challenges.
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 problem.
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 of the main aspects of pollution provided by people's self. The
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 for
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 is that the public does not understand how they came
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 of
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 goal. Environments should secure more extra bins in public places and raise
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there are big places to clean and less count of employees.
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 large problem unemployment.
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 of them are big cities have a high level of community and low working place.
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 could lead to immigration or might result in a decrease in education.
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, Russia the biggest country in the world does not have
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 kind of problem. Because they cater extra bins in more places,
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 gives all people job. Having everything mentioned , I come to
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 that management needs to more care about joblessness to solve problems like pollution.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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