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Band 2.5

Children should always follow their parents’ advice . To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement .

#children #parents’ #advice
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Parents
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 usually give
children
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advice
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 to help them deal with their problems or avoid
thing
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things
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 that might hurt them when they are young
Children
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 at young ages may not know what is good for them or what kind of things might hurt them so
parents
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gives
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advice
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 to protect their
child
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 , but when
children
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 grow up they can understand what is good or what is bad for them , and they don’t need their
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parents’
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advice
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 . like a five
years
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year
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 old kid
know
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 they must not play with a knife because they might cut their hand or get hurt . When
children
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 are older and they are almost a teenager they want to make their
decisions
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own decisions
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 and don’t need
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parents’
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their parents’
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advice
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 anymore . sometimes is good to take
advice
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 from
parents
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 in some
situation
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, but it is not good for them to let their
parents
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 decide about
teenagers
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teenagers'
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 lives because it would be the life that
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 made and the
teenage
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 will not enjoy that life
Parents
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 can always support their
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child
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children
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 and help them to make good decisions , but they have to let their
child
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 to make their own lives and if the
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child
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children
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asked
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 about their thoughts they should give them their
opinion
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opinions
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, but let the
child
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 to make their own
decision
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parental guidance
  • crucial
  • life lessons
  • best interests
  • life experience
  • understanding
  • challenges
  • invaluable
  • independence
  • critical thinking
  • relying solely
  • hinder
  • beliefs
  • desires
  • generational changes
  • rapid pace
  • social and technological changes
  • outdated
  • applicable
  • digital age
  • necessitating
  • balance
  • tradition
  • modernity
  • deeply ingrained
  • value
  • evolve
  • honoring
  • deviating
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