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The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides information on education and
employment
rates
 in eight different
countries
 in Europe in 2015.
Overall
, there's a clear correlation between the
employment
 rate and the average
income
as well as
 education
rates
, meaning, the higher the
employment
 the higher the other
rates
 are, despite few exceptions. In
the
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northern European
countries
 like
UK
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the UK
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, Norway and Austria,
all
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the
employement
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employment
, education and
income
rates
 are higher than in the other
countries
 employing
for
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over 70% of
population
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the population
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. The exception is,
however
, for Austria, whose average
income
 is only half of that in Norway, which is the highest in
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 (41,483). The second highest
income
 is found in Luxemburg (34,320),
although
, its
employment
rates
 are relatively low, under 70%,
similarly
 found
also
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in Latvia, Bulgaria,
Portugal
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and Portugal
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, but in
those
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 the average
income
 is only under 10,000.
Nevertheless
, in Greece, only half of the population is employed,
the
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and the
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income
 is 7,520 compared to Bulgaria, where 60% are working, but the average salary is approximately slightly over 3,000, which makes it the lowest compared to the other
countries
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, rates, countries, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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