Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think it is better to work for different organisations.
In many
places
we may spend most of our lives in the same working place. And we can either stay with the companyAdd a comma
places,
,
or Remove the comma
apply
work
at the same organisation. Some people
think that it's benficial
to stay Correct your spelling
beneficial
with in
the same Correct your spelling
within
buisness
. Correct your spelling
business
While
others,
believe it's better to change Remove the comma
apply
working
environment. Personally, I believe Add an article
the working
its
better to join different Replace the word
it's
it is
companies
will be more rewarding. The following essay will elustrate
on both sides of the argument.
There are many Correct your spelling
elaborate
companies
to choose seeking employment with them,
and working for different Remove the comma
apply
companies
has helped many people
in many ways. In the first place, working for diffrent
organizations will expose Correct your spelling
different
people
to different environments. This
allow
them to grow Change the verb form
allows
knowledge
. For instance
, my uncle worked for three IT companies
and now he's consultant
Add an article
a consultant
in
IBM. Change preposition
at
This
experience allowed him to achieve his goal. Secondly
, exposure to new
working environment Correct article usage
a new
bring
more Correct subject-verb agreement
brings
chllenges
, Correct your spelling
challenges
this
inturn
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in turn
inhance
Correct your spelling
enhance
people
Change noun form
people's
emplyee
skills. Correct your spelling
employee
Therefore
,being able to work
in work
in different places grant
you every time more Correct subject-verb agreement
grants
knowledge
and experience amonge
Correct your spelling
among
others
and interesting.
Correct quantifier usage
other
On the other hand
, some people
prefer to work
at
the same business for their entire life. Spending more time at the same corporation benefits Change preposition
in
people
getting promotion
and family health Fix the agreement mistake
promotions
benefit
. Fix the agreement mistake
benefits
For example
, my brother start
as a pharmacy technician with hmc medical and presently he is a senior Change the verb form
starts
phamacist
leading one of the Correct your spelling
pharmacist
organization
pharmacies. Change noun form
organization's
Moreover
, its
beneficial to maintain Replace the word
it's
it is
steady
working place because learning policies and company rules may take a lot of time to learn and implement, Correct article usage
a steady
for example
, phcc corporation considered
to be the oldest in the Add a missing verb
is considered
gulf
region and so Capitalize word
Gulf
employee
should maintain Add an article
the employee
knowledge
about policy for every inspection which is taking longer to know
learn and to implement in their working space with Add the particle
know to
team
Correct your spelling
teamwork
work
.
To conclude
, both situation have
their own benefits and drawbacks but I still maintain that spending our careers with Change the verb form
has
diferent
Correct your spelling
different
companies
will provide more knowledge
, experience and career grow
.Replace the word
growth
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