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the diagram shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

the diagram shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided process diagram represents the stages of electricity generation in a hydroelectric
power
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 station.
overall
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, it can be seen that
this
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 linear process
commencing
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 with
water
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 coming from the river into a high-level
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reservior
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reservoir
 and ending with generating
power
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 in the
power
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 station.
To begin
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 with, river
water
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go
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 to
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a high
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high level
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high-level
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reservior
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reservoir
 closed by a dam at night
time
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 and opened at day
time
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 to intake.
At
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day
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the daytime
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time
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, when the dam
open
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opens
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 the flow of
water
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run
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 to generate electricity by reversible
turbines
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. Meanwhile,
water
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 goes through reversible
turbines
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, which
operates
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operate
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generator
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the generator
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at
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in
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 day
time
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and than
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than
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then
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 go to
low-level
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the low-level
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reservior
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reservoir
.
Moreover
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,
generator
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the generator
a generator
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 is connected
with
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to
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 the reversible
turbines
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 in the
power
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 station, which generate
power
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and
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apply
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that goes to
national
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the national
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 grid through
power
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 lines. At night
time
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,
water
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 from
low-level
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the low-level
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reservior
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reservoir
reservoirs
pumped
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is pumped
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 by the reversible
turbines
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 and help the
water
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 to flow during pumping into the high-level
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reservior
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reservoir
.
This
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 process
keep
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keeps
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 going and
generate
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generates
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power
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 through the generator.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power, water, reservior, time, turbines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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