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the diagram shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

the diagram shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided process diagram represents the stages of electricity generation in a hydroelectric
power
 station.
overall
, it can be seen that
this
 linear process
commencing
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commences
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 with
water
 coming from the river into a high-level
reservior
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reservoir
 and ending with generating
power
 in the
power
 station.
To begin
 with, river
water
go
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 to
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a high
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high level
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high-level
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reservior
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reservoir
 closed by a dam at night
time
 and opened at day
time
 to intake.
At
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In
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day
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the daytime
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time
, when the dam
open
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opens
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 the flow of
water
run
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runs
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 to generate electricity by reversible
turbines
. Meanwhile,
water
 goes through reversible
turbines
, which
operates
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operate
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generator
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the generator
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at
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in
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 day
time
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and than
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than
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then
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 go to
low-level
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the low-level
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reservior
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reservoir
.
Moreover
,
generator
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the generator
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 is connected
with
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to
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 the reversible
turbines
 in the
power
 station, which generate
power
and
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apply
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that goes to
national
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the national
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 grid through
power
 lines. At night
time
,
water
 from
low-level
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the low-level
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reservior
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reservoir
reservoirs
pumped
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is pumped
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 by the reversible
turbines
 and help the
water
 to flow during pumping into the high-level
reservior
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reservoir
.
This
 process
keep
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keeps
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 going and
generate
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generates
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power
 through the generator.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power, water, reservior, time, turbines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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