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Some people feel that government should take a large proportion of people's salaries to pay for necessary public services such as roads and schools. Others feel that taxes are a bad thing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is believed by some people that
government
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 should take a higher percentage of residents' earnings to pay for essential needs,
such
 as roads and schools.
However
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 others are against
of
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taxes
 increasing. I believe that changing a fee from people is the best way to develop the quality of living conditions. On the one hand, there are lots of reasons for paying higher
taxes
. The main advantage is
the
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providing citizens with better services and access to affordable healthcare.
This
 means that, when
government
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the government
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 receive residential payments,
they
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it
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 can use them for developing different areas of the city.
This fees
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These fees
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 can increase the quality of roads, public transport, infrastructure and
different
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other facilities.
Furthermore
, higher
taxes
 may improve the conditions of state hospitals and schools,
also
 higher salaries for doctors and teachers are quite important things.
On the other hand
, some residents disagree with
this
 encouragement. They claim that the money they earned, it is only their own savings.
This
 means that
,
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 some citizens don't want to pay higher
taxes
, because they used to spend a certain amount of money on their essentials.
Moreover
, increasing
of
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prices continue to
growing
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 up straightly. In
fact
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fact,
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 some citizens' salaries simply cover their expenditures. So, it may affect their personal living conditions. In summary, some agree that the salary
has
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taken for
the
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public facilities by the government as a tax is a great job,
others
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while others
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 believe that increasing
of
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fees can lead to a poor and homeless society. In my point of view, tax payments
is
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are
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 an economically influential thing to make better our economic environment in future.
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