You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
report drives
Wrong verb form
is driven
from
the table and charts of the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain, and how it is spent.
A glance look at the graph reveals in the police budget between 2017 and 2018 there is Change preposition
by
increase
in all sources ,not only is Add an article
an increase
the increase
this
point clear,but also
the money was spent in
three things,salaries and technology and buildings and transport.
Notably,in the national Change preposition
on
government
there is an increase in 2017 was 175.5m Add a comma
government,
while
in 2018 raised to 177.8m. And in local taxes in 2017 91.2m as was as
in 2018 up to 102.3m , it's a big increase. In other Correct word choice
apply
sources
2017 was 38m and 2018 38.5 a very slight raise.The total in all two Add a comma
sources,
years
did not exceed 319. In 2017, it was 304.7m, while
in 2018 it was 318.6m.
Additionally
Add a comma
Additionally,
observer
how the money spent Replace the word
observe
in
Change preposition
on
the
salaries (officers and staff) Correct article usage
apply
the
percentage in 2017 was 75% and in 2018 decreased to 69% notable low. As for Correct article usage
apply
increasment
,Correct your spelling
increase
the
technology increased as it was 8% in 2017 Correct article usage
apply
while
in 2018 it became 14%. The building and transport is
the same Correct subject-verb agreement
are
percent
in both Change the spelling
per cent
years
.
Overall
there is noticeable
rise Correct article usage
a noticeable
ing
the police budget in both Correct your spelling
in
years
. In the how the money spent
the salaries decreased in 2018 , the technology soared in 2018 , Add a missing verb
was spent
the
building and transport did not change in Correct word choice
and the
both
Correct determiner usage
either
years
.Fix the agreement mistake
year
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words m, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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