The best way to travel is travel in a group led by a tour guide. To what extent do you agree or disagree
the
adventages
of travelling in a group led by a Correct your spelling
advantages
tour
guide
are varied, and its disadventages
are no less noticeable. I personally agree with Correct your spelling
disadvantages
this
conviction and this
essay will provide some example
.
There are various reasons for Fix the agreement mistake
examples
take
a trip with a leader. Change the verb form
taking
First,
not only they
know a lot about the place that we want to pass through but Add a missing verb
do they
also
they be
able to make a plan so we just need to follow the available routine and transportation Change the verb form
are
don’t
be a Correct your spelling
won’t
seriously
problem. Change the adverb
serious
Beside
, there are some hide destinations for Replace the word
Besides
Add an article
the visitor
a visitor
visitor
, the Fix the agreement mistake
visitors
tour
guide
maybe can find it
and draw up a list of places worth visiting for us and we will not miss any Correct pronoun usage
them
stop
. Fix the agreement mistake
stops
Secondly
, whenever we go overseas there exist
a Correct subject-verb agreement
exists
critically
problem, we can know as “language barriers” and that’s why we must hire a Change the adverb
critical
guide
Change the verb form
guided
tour
to go with. For example
, my trip to Japan, which is the most difficult language in over
the world, and so on the benefit of that can be Change preposition
apply
showed
.
On the one Change the form of the verb
shown
hand
there are undeniable upsides of Add a comma
hand,
go
with a group led by a Change the verb form
going
tour
guide
, but on the other hand
, it is crystal clear that it has several difficult
. As we Replace the word
difficulties
can
know there Verb problem
apply
are
some impressive scenery but we Change the verb form
is
cant
stop Correct your spelling
can't
to enjoy
it because it can bother the other people Wrong verb form
enjoying
in
our Change preposition
on
tour
. There are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
also
about the food there, we can have our personally
choice and there are some Change the word
personal
tour
companies have linked up with restaurants to make profit
, that’s really a bad experiment about their local food and specialities in that country. Add an article
a profit
Moreover
, if you go by yourself you can have
your own choice,Verb problem
make
plan
, and don’t need to disturb Correct word choice
and plan
any body
but their always Correct your spelling
anybody
have
many inexpedient problems Verb problem
apply
will
come to you, but Correct pronoun usage
that will
you
want to explore and have more experience you Correct word choice
if you
also
can go alone.
In conclusion, I totally agree with
Change preposition
that
this
option is the best way to travel in a group led by a tour
guide
. Don’t get me wrong, travel alone has its
own interesting and Replace the word
it's
it is
worth
a try Add a missing verb
is worth
some day
.Correct your spelling
someday
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