The best way to travel is travel in a group led by a tour guide. To what extent do you agree or disagree

the
adventages
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advantages
of travelling in a group led by a
tour
guide
are varied, and its
disadventages
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disadvantages
are no less noticeable. I personally agree with
this
conviction and
this
essay will provide some
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. There are various reasons for
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a trip with a leader.
First,
not only
they
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know a lot about the place that we want to pass through but
also
they
be
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able to make a plan so we just need to follow the available routine and transportation
don’t
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won’t
be a
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problem.
Beside
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, there are some hide destinations for
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the visitor
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visitor
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, the
tour
guide
maybe can find
it
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them
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and draw up a list of places worth visiting for us and we will not miss any
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.
Secondly
, whenever we go overseas there
exist
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a
critically
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problem, we can know as “language barriers” and that’s why we must hire a
guide
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tour
to go with.
For example
, my trip to Japan, which is the most difficult language in
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the world, and so on the benefit of that can be
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. On the one
hand
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there are undeniable upsides of
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with a group led by a
tour
guide
, but
on the other hand
, it is crystal clear that it has several
difficult
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. As we
can
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know there
are
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some impressive scenery but we
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can't
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stop
to enjoy
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it because it can bother the other people
in
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our
tour
. There
are
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also
about the food there, we can have our
personally
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choice and there are some
tour
companies have linked up with restaurants to make
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, that’s really a bad experiment about their local food and specialities in that country.
Moreover
, if you go by yourself you can
have
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your own choice,
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and plan
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, and don’t need to disturb
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but their always
have
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many inexpedient problems
will
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come to you, but
you
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want to explore and have more experience you
also
can go alone. In conclusion, I totally agree
with
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this
option is the best way to travel in a group led by a
tour
guide
. Don’t get me wrong, travel alone has
its
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own interesting and
worth
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is worth
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a try
some day
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someday
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • safety
  • organization
  • knowledgeable
  • itinerary
  • local customs
  • language barrier
  • freedom
  • flexibility
  • random
  • spontaneous
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