All over the world, socities are facing a growing problem with obesity What are the reason for the rise in obeisity and how could be tackled
The rates of
obesity
are risen
unusually fast Wrong verb form
rising
nowdays
and Correct the word
nowadays
spread
like Add a missing verb
are spread
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an epepdemic
epepdemic
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epidemic
epidemics
in
all over the world. The main Change preposition
apply
cause
for this
problem is the amount of sugar
in food
, yet it can be solved by government
enforcing Correct article usage
the government
school
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schools
have
Fix the infinitive
to have
a
healthy diets for students
The current Correct article usage
apply
cause
of obesity
problems is high
amount of Add an article
a high
the high
sugar
in many food
. It must be recognized that the cost ofChange to a plural noun
foods
product
with high Fix the agreement mistake
products
sugar
quanities
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quantities
lower
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is lower
that
these healthy ones that’s why it’s showing up everywhere and consumers Correct word choice
than
have
tend to choose Unnecessary verb
apply
food
with high percent of sweetener
because of its Fix the agreement mistake
sweeteners
prize
. In other word when people eat these unhealthy Correct your spelling
price
food
,sugar
messes with their brain which make people more hungry and want eat
more. Fix the infinitive
to eat
Consequently
, it cause
obesity
and lead to many diseases like diabetes heart disease, liver and cancer. From
American nutritionist results that Change preposition
According to
sugar
can disorder the brain and prevent it receive
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from receiving
leptin
signal so the brain think Correct article usage
a leptin
body
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the body
still
hungry, Add a missing verb
is still
that’s
starvation.
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and that’s
However
the solution can be found in government action Add a comma
However,
in changing
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to change
diet
of many schools. The most effective approach is for Add an article
the diet
school
to limit Fix the agreement mistake
schools
protion
sizes and Correct your spelling
protein
putting
fruit Wrong verb form
put
also
vegetable
in Fix the agreement mistake
vegetables
student’s
diets. Fix the agreement mistake
students’
Beside
schools should Correct your spelling
Besides
puts
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put
kids
mass index on their report cards. As Change noun form
kids'
kid's
the
Correct article usage
a
results
, Fix the agreement mistake
result
student
can have a healthy lifestyle at Fix the agreement mistake
students
school
through strict
diet and exercise in PE Correct article usage
a strict
subject
, Fix the agreement mistake
subjects
go
Verb problem
apply
along with
the
help from family through the report cards. Take Wagonwheel Correct article usage
apply
school
as Capitalize word
School
a
example, Change the article
an
this
school
started healthy diets
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diet
stagegies
many years ago and Correct your spelling
strategies
really
successful in reducing Add a missing verb
was really
weights
for many students.
Fix the agreement mistake
weight
Thus
, it can be seen that the principal cause
of obesity
is high
amount of Add an article
a high
the high
sugar
in food
. Nevertheless
, the change in diet
of schools can contribute Add an article
the diet
reduce
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to reducing
obesity
rate Correct article usage
the obesity
of
many countriesChange preposition
in
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