Some people like to try a new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your opinion.

Different people have different lifestyles, some
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to have new experiences,
whereas
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to continue with what they have been doing. Trying new
things
mostly provides
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new learning, which enhances
one
's knowledge base.
However
, doing
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set of activities continuously,
developes
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develops
one
's expertise in the specific activities. Both of these
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to be critically evaluated in
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essay before drawing towards a conclusion. It is a known fact that
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doing something is always a kind of a
challange
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challenge
. The level of challenge differs based on the circumstance. But people like to experience new
things
, as looking for a change is
one
aspect of human nature. Because it is believed that new opportunities
rejuvanates
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rejuvenates
and
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human
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brain. By doing so, it increases the working capacity and efficiency.
For
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tasting new food, visiting new places,
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a change in home arrangement would bring these benefits.
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, the need to do new
things
would create frustration if that couldn't be achieved.
For instance
, if a person
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to visit new places and his/her budget doesn't facilitate that.
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doing the same thing or continuing with what is familiar, makes someone more comfortable in
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life.
Also
, in some cases repeating the same enhances the expertise in that particular topic.
For example
, reading about the same topic would develop the subject knowledge
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that topic. It can be argued that
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this
leads people to be in
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comfort zone and could impede their progress.
For instance
, if a toddler continued to do the same, that kid would not be able to walk and run. In summary, working on fresh activities is a good way to have a change in life, but
this
should be
practiced
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with a better understanding to avoid additional stress.
In contrast
, proceeding with a simple lifestyle by doing
things
which are familiar makes
one
's life
confortable
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comfortable
but could be
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.
Therefore
, it could be
sumarised
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summarised
summarized
trying new
things
is a good way to have a challenging and everchanging lifestyle to be energised and effective.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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