Some people like to try a new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your opinion.
Different people have different lifestyles, some
are prefer
to have new experiences, Change the verb form
prefer
whereas
some are prefer
to continue with what they have been doing. Trying new Change the verb form
prefer
things
mostly provides a
new learning, which enhances Remove the article
apply
one
's knowledge base. However
, doing same
set of activities continuously, Change the article
the same
developes
Correct your spelling
develops
one
's expertise in the specific activities. Both of these view
Replace the word
viewpoints
points
to be critically evaluated in Verb problem
are
this
essay before drawing towards a conclusion.
It is a known fact that,
doing something is always a kind of a Remove the comma
apply
challange
. The level of challenge differs based on the circumstance. But people like to experience new Correct your spelling
challenge
things
, as looking for a change is one
aspect of human nature. Because it is believed that new opportunities rejuvanates
and Correct your spelling
rejuvenates
refreshes
Correct subject-verb agreement
refresh
human
brain. By doing so, it increases the working capacity and efficiency. Add an article
the human
For
example
tasting new food, visiting new places, Add a comma
example,
even
a change in home arrangement would bring these benefits. Correct word choice
and even
Nevetheless
, the need to do new Correct your spelling
Nevertheless
things
would create frustration if that couldn't be achieved. For instance
, if a person want
to visit new places and his/her budget doesn't facilitate that.
Change the verb form
wants
In
contrast
doing the same thing or continuing with what is familiar, makes someone more comfortable in Add a comma
contrast,
day to day
life. Add a hyphen
day-to-day
Also
, in some cases repeating the same enhances the expertise in that particular topic. For example
, reading about the same topic would develop the subject knowledge on
that topic. It can be argued thatChange preposition
of
,
Remove the comma
apply
this
leads people to be in the
comfort zone and could impede their progress. Change the word
their
For instance
, if a toddler continued to do the same, that kid would not be able to walk and run.
In summary, working on fresh activities is a good way to have a change in life, but this
should be practiced
with a better understanding to avoid additional stress. Change the spelling
practised
In contrast
, proceeding with a simple lifestyle by doing things
which are familiar makes one
's life confortable
but could be Correct your spelling
comfortable
bored
. Replace the word
boring
Therefore
, it could be sumarised
trying new Correct your spelling
summarised
summarized
things
is a good way to have a challenging and everchanging lifestyle to be energised and effective.Submitted by nhicsenaratne on
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