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the table below shows the number of visitors in the UK and their average spending from 2003 to 2008

the table below shows the number of visitors in the UK and their average spending from 2003 to 2008
The supplied table depicts data about how many people visit the UK after that time is allocated by individuals over the
period
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 of 6 years between 2003 and 2008. Seen together, the most significant facts to emerge from the table are that the proportion of visitors remarkably surged during the whole time,
whereas
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 other sections slightly increased apart from average nights per
visitors
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, which underwent a negligible drop. Looking at the information
in-more
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in more
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details
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, in 2003, visits accounted for 24.715 million and
this
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 figure merely dramatically rocketed until 2007
then
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 it reached
at
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the
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a
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 higher point
with
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of
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 32.778 million
of
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visitors but
this
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 point witnessed a drop to 31.88 million in 2008.
Besides
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, pound billions made up 11.855 billion at the
started
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period
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 and there was a substantial rise to 16.323 billion
at the end
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 of
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period
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the period
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. Focusing on the average spend per
visits
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, which made up 475, notwithstanding, dropping to 466 in 2004, there was a slight increase to 511 in 2008.
Furthermore
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, Average Nights per
visits
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visit
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,
that
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which
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 consisted of 8,2
on
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in
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 both years (2003 and 2004), in spite of
soar
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 to 8.4 during the two years,
this
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 point experienced a decline to a mere 7.7 and it stayed at the same level
at the end
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 of
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period
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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