23.Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve. Others, however, believe that these problems cannot be solved if individuals do not take actions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some would argue that it is too difficult for
people
to solve environmental hazards, while
others say that everyone should take actions
to figure out solutions for these Fix the agreement mistake
action
problems
. This
essay would argue that although
just a few individuals
cannot do anything,
if everybody works together the Remove the comma
apply
problems
will be solved.
On the one hand, if a person wants to solve environmental problems
by himself it is impossible. This
is because if others do not take actions
, what a few Fix the agreement mistake
action
individuals
can do, is very little and irrelevant, since global warming and other activities that are harmful to the planet,
are caused by all Remove the comma
apply
people
in the world. Then
, with just a short
number of Correct word choice
small
people
trying to solve the problem is impossible, all the effort done will have no effect, as there are more people
damaging than protecting the earth. Recent research concluded that a large number of people
tried to look for solutions for the issues related to the environment, but they realized that there were too many people
not doing anything. However
, I believe that if all individuals
work
together, solutions can be found.
On the other hand
, everybody should work
together to reduce the environmental problems
. Many people
think that these difficulties should be solved, but if no one take
Change the verb form
takes
actions
, Fix the agreement mistake
action
then
is useless. Just having the thought that the
climate change, pollution and contamination are huge Correct article usage
apply
problems
, nothing will change. Everyone should take actions
to protect the planet, all Fix the agreement mistake
action
individuals
should work
together, also
start reducing Correct word choice
and also
emission
of gas or any activity that could decrease the global heating and any catastrophe, in Add an article
the emission
this
way, probelms
can be solved little by little. Correct your spelling
problems
For example
, China is a country which is very contaminated, and it is visible in the air and sky, years ago, when celebrating the olympics
in Pekin, China announced to Change the capitalization
Olympics
prohibit
Replace the word
prohibition
the
use of cars for three days. All Change preposition
of the
chinese
Change the capitalization
Chinese
people
listened to the order that the government gave, and after three days, the air were
fresher and the sky was blue and prettier, so Change the verb form
was
that is
why, working all together can lead to solve
difficult issues. I believe Change the verb form
solving
this
point of view is preferable because if people
work
together, they are stronger and can solve every problem that they have to face.
In conclusion, although
one person alone cannot do anything Fix the infinitive
to resolve
resolve
ecological questions, Fix the infinitive
to resolve
Correct word choice
apply
and
it is, Correct word choice
apply
therefore
, better to persuade all humans to work
together so Correct article usage
that
Correct determiner usage
that
the
catastrophes can be avoided, and Correct your spelling
that
Replace the word
save
safe
the planet.Replace the word
save
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