23.Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve. Others, however, believe that these problems cannot be solved if individuals do not take actions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some would argue that it is too difficult for
people
to solve environmental hazards,
while
others say that everyone should take
actions
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to figure out solutions for these
problems
.
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essay would argue that
although
just a few
individuals
cannot do anything
,
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if everybody works together the
problems
will be solved. On the one hand, if a person wants to solve environmental
problems
by himself it is impossible.
This
is because if others do not take
actions
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, what a few
individuals
can do, is very little and irrelevant, since global warming and other activities that are harmful to the planet
,
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are caused by all
people
in the world.
Then
, with just a
short
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number of
people
trying to solve the problem is impossible, all the effort done will have no effect, as there are more
people
damaging than protecting the earth. Recent research concluded that a large number of
people
tried to look for solutions for the issues related to the environment, but they realized that there were too many
people
not doing anything.
However
, I believe that if all
individuals
work
together, solutions can be found.
On the other hand
, everybody should
work
together to reduce the environmental
problems
. Many
people
think that these difficulties should be solved, but if no one
take
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actions
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,
then
is useless. Just having the thought that
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climate change, pollution and contamination are huge
problems
, nothing will change. Everyone should take
actions
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to protect the planet, all
individuals
should
work
together,
also
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and also
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start reducing
emission
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the emission
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of gas or any activity that could decrease the global heating and any catastrophe, in
this
way,
probelms
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problems
can be solved little by little.
For example
, China is a country which is very contaminated, and it is visible in the air and sky, years ago, when celebrating the
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in Pekin, China announced to
prohibit
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the
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use of cars for three days. All
chinese
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people
listened to the order that the government gave, and after three days, the air
were
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fresher and the sky was blue and prettier, so
that is
why, working all together can lead to
solve
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difficult issues. I believe
this
point of view is preferable because if
people
work
together, they are stronger and can solve every problem that they have to face. In conclusion,
although
one person alone cannot do anything
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resolve
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ecological questions,
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and
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it is,
therefore
, better to persuade all humans to
work
together so
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that
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the
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that
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catastrophes can be avoided, and
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safe
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the planet.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global warming
  • pollution
  • deforestation
  • overwhelming
  • Paris Agreement
  • sustainable practices
  • waste reduction
  • conserving energy
  • market demands
  • awareness campaigns
  • systemic change
  • ripple effect
  • environmental degradation
  • lifestyle choices
  • regulations
  • accountability
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