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Your child is attending a school that does not provide adequate sports facilities. Write a letter to the school principal requesting improvements in the sports facilities for the students. In the letter: Introduce yourself and your child Describe the lack of sports facilities at the school Explain the importance of sports for the students and request improvements

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am
john micheal
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John Micheal
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, my son
juhan micheal
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Juhan Micheal
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 is studying in 5th standard in your
school
.
i
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I
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 am writing
this
 letter to let you know about
lack
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the lack
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 of
sports
 facilities
in
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on
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 your
school
 premises. I am very sad to know that your
school
dont
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doesn't
 have
proper
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the proper
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 infrastructure for
physIcal
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physical
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 and
sports
 activities.
specially
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 when
school
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the school
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 campus is spread
in
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over
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 5 acres of land. because of
this
school
childrens
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children
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 are
becaming
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becoming
 sick and
obeses
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obese
. the
school
 has only 1 badminton court.
Furthermote
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Furthermore
,
sports
 are necessary for
overall
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the overall
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devlopment
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development
 of kids .
by
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By
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 playing
sports
 they learn collaboration ,
team
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and team
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 spirit.
also
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 they develop
physcical
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physical
 strength and mental toughness.
its
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it's
it is
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 very necessary to build
sports
 facilities in the
school
. it will help children to rejuvenate and relax .
i
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I
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 would like to
reqest
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request
 to provide
sports
 facilities basketball court, tennis court,
football
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and football
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 pitch from next
acadmic
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academic
 year. Yours faithfully, Bill Morris
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea and use appropriate transition words to improve the coherence and cohesion of the letter.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your claims about the lack of sports facilities and the impact on students.
task achievement
Use formal language and avoid contractions (e.g., don't -> do not).
grammatical range and accuracy
Proofread your letter for grammar and spelling errors.
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