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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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The bar chart depicts how families have been using their earnings between 1968 and 2018 in one country, units were measured in
percentage
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. It can be seen that there were various items for
familes
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families
 expenditure shown above, and the highest was food and leisure
while
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 fuel and power was the least
on
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in
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 the period given. Looking at the information in more detail, the proportion of food in 1968
were
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was
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 noticeably higher rather than other variables, at approximately 35%. The figures
such
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 as housing and clothing needs were lower, at about 10%. The lowest rate was revealed by fuel and power, at more than 5%. Meanwhile, personal and household goods showed
at
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apply
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the same
percentage
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, at less than 10%. By 2018, more than 20%
people
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of people
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 in one country prefer to
spent
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spend
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 their income
to
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on
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 relaxation activities.
On the other hand
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, the
percentage
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 of housing
were
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was
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 lower, about 18%.
The
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Then
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, it was followed by transportation, at over 10%. Personal goods were the
least
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lowest
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 figure with a
percentage
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 of less than 5%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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