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Students should spend a period of time studying and living in a different country to learn language and culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think
students
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 should go abroad to learn different languages and local
culture
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 for their school time. I believe that using the opportunity to explore and obtain the
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diversity
diverse
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far
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 the drawbacks. Learning
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language
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 would be easier when the
students
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a foreigne
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foreigne
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foreign
 country, it
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 straightforward program to
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 their expression barrier.
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students
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 may have good grammar and spelling, and others may opposite from that which had
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perfect speech on the speaking but not satisfying
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the
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writing.
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 could resolve the problem once they were
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outside of their comfort zone.
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, the scenario would force them to write and speak
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properly
 when they
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apply
any
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 documents from the university department or
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able to communicate with local people.
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, it would be useful and helpful for any
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foreign
foreigner
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 their expression, but
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 enhance the
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on
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 their study scheme. In comparison, living in the mother tongue area to learn
other
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another language
other languages
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language
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 could be difficult for them which would hardly
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control their discipline
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 study
plan
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.
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,
students
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 are confident to use their first
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 to express themself, if the
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school
 to
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restrict
 or
prevent
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prevents
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 them
to speak
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from speaking
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 another
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 in
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the classroom
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 or
on
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a
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specific
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, some
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 would not follow the rules correctly and it would
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 the learning outcome especially
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 when they facing a foreigner they would only use certain
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sentence
 or vocabulary to communicate with them which means the conversation could not go more
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school
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 made
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discipline
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their guideline
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not
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teenager
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students
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 would follow the order to learn
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language
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, the result can be seen
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the
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high school
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. In conclusion, obtanning
other
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another language
other languages
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language
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 could be tough when the
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 their comfort zone, but if they have an opportunity to go
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abroad
 that would be
idealy
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ideal
ideally
 for them to
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gain
 and
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 various
perspective
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perspectives
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. I firmly
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 living in
different
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a different
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 country to study the
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 and
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lifestyle
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that is
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 a
fatually
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vital
 course for them to develop and adopt their ability
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 their second or third
language
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.

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coherence cohesion
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lexical resource
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grammatical range accuracy
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • immersion
  • cultural exchange
  • global diversity
  • critical thinking
  • intercultural communication
  • resilience
  • adaptability
  • professional networks
  • language proficiency
  • educational systems
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