In some countries, some people are renting accomodation, while other are buying their own homes. Does renting accomodation have more advantages or more disadvantages than buying a place?

Human civilization nowadays thinks it is more convenient to live in a rental
house
instead
of buying a new one. Houses in the city tend to be more expensive
due to
the high demand and developed infrastructure.
However
, I believe both of the views above have advantages and disadvantages which will be explained below.
To begin
, the number of poverty in developing
country
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continues to rise. Many society especially students who live in another city prefer to settle their life in a flat or rented
house
instead
of
buy
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a new one. There are several benefits to living in rented accommodation.
First,
leasing a
house
or flat tends to be cheaper.
Second,
people do not need to pay for extra maintenance.
For instance
,
due to
the high number of criminals in West Papua, nomads especially women prefer to live in flats because it is safer and more comfortable.
On the contrary
, for people who understand finance, rented accommodation is not a suitable choice for long-term investment. They believe it is more wasteful than buying a
house
or apartment.
For example
,
elderly
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in Indonesia always advise youngsters to buy a
house
as soon as possible.
House
is one of
the
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good investment because the price
tend
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to increase each year.
To conclude
, there are advantages and disadvantages of renting a place to stay. It depends on how people can gain benefits from every decision they make. Renting a
house
can be a choice for a short-term place to stay,
while
buying a
house
or apartment is
lifetime
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investment.
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