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It is believed that secondary school children should study international news as one of their school subjects. Others think that this is a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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Nowadays there is an argument in the academic community in the
society
 as the curriculum of the schools should contain international
news
 as a subject and should allocate a reasonable time to that. But some people come up with the opinion
that is
 a waste of valuable
school
 time. But in my point of view adequate time should be reserved to study the world through international
news
. The main objective of the
school
 is to make students strengthen their
knowledge
.
Knowledge
 has no limitations and boundaries. As a quality product of a
school
, a student should be able to survive in the
society
. Nowadays general
knowledge
 and the common sense of living are more important than subject-related concepts and theories in books.
Therefore
 it is not a wastage of adding a subject to the curriculum as International
News
. Education is not only a challenge in modern
society
 but
also
 a game between continents, regions and countries. Every country is planning to increase their index of education and become a giant
of
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education. In
this
 situation, Literal subjects
such
 as Mathematics, Science, and Technology have to be learnt and gaining that
knowledge
 is more important than international relationships and a sense of living.
However
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 I strongly believe that
school
 should produce an individual who is empowered with
knowledge
 of subject matters, a sense of living and interpersonal and international relationships. By studying international
news
, they are able to study
society
 and they would be able to make a better world where everyone can live peacefully.
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