The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
These maps illustrate the present scenario and the future plan for
improvement
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the improvement
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of a little suburb named Islip. Presently,
this
area
contains a small number of buildings with only connecting roads from the west to the east
whereas
Future
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development proposal
is showing
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shows
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a round
road
covering the city replacing
previous
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the previous
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one.
Besides
, several new construction will take place. Islip town has a rural
area
now. Some stores are situated beside the main
road
and the school is in the shortest part of the
area
. some
residencial
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residential
area
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areas
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can be seen without proper
road
connection
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connections
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. A sub-
road
connect
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connects
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the park and the school from the main
road
. The plan for the future introduces a nice transport pathway covering the city.
Additionally
, there will be a
road
for pedestrians. Obviously, all the
building
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buildings
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and
area
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areas
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will be connected with a
road
.
In Addition
, a new bus stand, shopping mall and car parking will be established connected by a walking
road
from the main
road
. New housing will be built
in
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on
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the north-east side near the car park. Some shops will replace the old
resedinsial
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residential
area
in
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on
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the south side and will be relocated beside the dual
carrigeway
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carriageway
. The
area
of the park will remain the same place as the school but a housing will be situated in the east of the educational institution.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area, road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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