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You recently bought a digital camera. You discovered that it was damaged and some components were missing.

#camera #components
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in order to complain about the problem which depends on my digital
camera
. For
the
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5 years, I have been purchasing and using your digital
camera
 products and I have been satisfied with the results.
Nevertheless
, I recently received a digital
camera
 manufactured by your company.
This
 letter is to complain about the unsatisfactory service that I received. It is not acceptable that
this
 digital
camera
 was broken. It was missing the
lans
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van
cap and the memory card slot in the
camre
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camera
is
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 heavily scratched even before I used it. I was
waiting
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 a higher level of service from your country and I am not really at all pleased
that
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 how things turned out.
That is
 why I would
be appreciated
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if
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 my money was refunded by you or a proper exchange for a new one since the product is still within its warranty period. I have been using many of your products
such
 as iron, oven, gas, air-conditioner, TV and other items in the past without any trouble . I hope
that
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to continue to have
good
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 relationship with your company. I look forward to your reply and solution to my problem. Tel:237392732 Bakhtiniso
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Make sure to clearly state the specific problem with the digital camera and the missing components.
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Provide more supporting details and examples to strengthen your complaint.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas in a logical and coherent manner, with a clear introduction and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Use appropriate paragraphing to separate your ideas and improve the overall structure.
coherence cohesion
Expand on your past positive experiences with the company to further emphasize your disappointment with the current situation.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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