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The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates a shift in temperature experienced in a month by three different countries namely
Paris
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,
Dubai
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, and
Sydney
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 in a given year.
Overall
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, it can be seen clearly from the graph that, the weather report in
Sydney
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 is not the same as in
Dubai
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 and
Paris
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.
Moreover
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,
Paris
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 and
Dubai
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 showed a decreasing trend during the end of the given year
while
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Sydney
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 experienced an upward trend.
To begin
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 with, in January
Sydney
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 had warm weather which is approximately 23
degrees
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Celsius
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 as compared to
Paris
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 is the coldest city with a temperature of 5
degrees
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Celsius
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.
However
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, the weather gradually rose to 15
degrees
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Celsius
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 in May and
then
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 fluctuated between June and July and suddenly dropped back to 5
degrees
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Celsius
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 in December.
Furthermore
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,
Dubai
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's temperature continues rising and reaching a peak of just above 35
degrees
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Celsius
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. Unfortunately decreased by roughly 22
degrees
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Celsius
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 in the final month.
In addition
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,
Sydney
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 temperatures gradually drop from April to June and hit their lowest in July above below 15
degrees
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, and rose to just above 20
degrees
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Celsius
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at the end
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 of the year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words paris, dubai, sydney, degrees, celsius with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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