8.The charts below show the percentage of people using public transport and that of people using private cars in five Australian cities between 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

8.The charts below show the percentage of people using public transport and that of people using private cars in five Australian cities between 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The line charts below display the
proportion
of individuals that
use
their own car and the ones that
use
public transportation in Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Perth and
Adeilaide
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Adelaide
from 2000 to 2010.
Overall
, in Adeilaide there is a
steadily
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increase in the
use
of
pritivate
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private
cars
and a
slightly
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slight
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variation in the
use
of public
transports
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transport
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. Brisbane’s public transit rose significantly,
while
use
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the use
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of personal
cars
in Melbourne
felt
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increased
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moderately.
Adeilaide
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Adelaide
is the city with
least
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the least
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use
public
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of public
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transportation , starting the
period
with just 5%,
this
number fluctuated gradually during
all
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apply
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the
period
, before 2008, in 5 different
years
reached
it
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highest point, 6%, but after 2008 it started to drop slightly, returning to 5%. In Brisbane, 15% of humans at the beginning of the
period
used public transits, after two
years
,
this
proportion
began to grow sharply, getting to 25% in 2006, after remaining two
years
stable, it started increasing modestly, ending the
period
at
appriximately
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approximately
28%. 70% of individuals in 2000 used their individual vehicle in Adelaide, being the city with the highest number of people using their own car,
this
proportion
rose moderately to just above 80% during the next 9
years
, and the
last
year it climbed considerably to 90%. Melbourne between 2000 and 2002, had 30% of people using personal
cars
, but in 2002 dropped
in
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10%, being at 20% in 2003,
this
grew gradually, reaching its
begenning
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beginning
rate in 2007 and during the next 4
years
the
proportion
varied, ending the
period
with just over 20% of people using private
cars
.
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