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It has often been suggested that the reintroduction of capital punishment would deter the ever increasing rate of serious crime. What is your view? Do you think that capital punishment should be reinstated?

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Introduction
The
judge
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have
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cabablity
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capability
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decrease
decreas
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decrease
crime
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the crime
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 rate by
put
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putting
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 hard
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punishment
punishement
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punishment
due to
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 deter
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criminals
crinmals
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crimes
Body paragraph 1
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 strongly agree with that
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opinion
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opinion
, the bad guys
dont
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don't
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anybodies
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anybody
 because they are fearing of
punishment
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 will show the
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times
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Body paragraph 2
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governments
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government
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has
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established the courts for
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separates
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separate
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peole
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people
 and give them their rights ,so we are seeing among capital cities some
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badges
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make
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crimes
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crimes
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therefore
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therefore
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a massive
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threat
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threat
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people
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 safety ,these
crimes
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 may lead to spread horror in
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community
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parties
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a lot
 of
people
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thier
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their
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avoid
 to going to some
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metro stations
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because
 they are fearing of
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stolen
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Body paragraph 3
,
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therefore
therfore
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apply
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 the strict
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punishment
punishement
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punishment
is
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a big
abig
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big
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to
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criminal
crminal
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criminal
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limitations
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limit
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explore
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security
securty
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security
among
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this
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Body paragraph 4
Moreover
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,
the
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apply
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poverty
povirty
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poverty
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to
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extend
extended
extened-
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crimes
crimes
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because
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because
when the
crminales
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criminals
are feeling
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feel
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 to need cover
thiers
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theirs
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requirements
requirments
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requirements
,that
guide
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guides
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them
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theme
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them
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do
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commit
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 many
crimes
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due to
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brings
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apply
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money ,so we can
predect
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predict
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numbers
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 of
crimes
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be increasing
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increase
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with known the presence
judicial
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of judicial
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 rulings ,
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 at some areas
people
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stoalen
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stolen
 during
day night
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 even the
polic
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police
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existes
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exists
existed
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dont
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don't
 account for any
punishment
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thus
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dublicate
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duplicate
punishment
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 which is publish fearing among
criminales
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criminals
Conclusion
In
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conclude
concluding
conclud
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conclusion
, the
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poverty
povierty
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government
 and the
justices
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justice
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 system have
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a great
agreat
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a great
 deal to
spread
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spreading
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crimes
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therefore
therfore
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therefore
 when the
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government
governments
goverments
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government
take
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takes
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 care of poor
people
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 and
offered
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offers
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them
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jobs
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also
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modefied
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modified
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ruling
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in put
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detered
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deterred
punishment
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then
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decreased
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 the rate of
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criminal
criminale
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crime
 and publish
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security
securty
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security
 in
comunty
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community

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reintroduction
  • capital punishment
  • deter
  • serious crime
  • controversial
  • argument
  • deterrent
  • potential criminals
  • heinous act
  • justice
  • human rights
  • government
  • execute
  • innocent individuals
  • legal system
  • wrongful convictions
  • alternatives
  • life imprisonment
  • parole
  • rectifying
  • emerges
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