Junk/Street Food is the most affordable meal for the working class. But health problems due to rampant and uncontrolled consumption are being compounded. It has therefore become imperative for governments to impose a higher tax on them. To what extent do you agree to this arrangement by the government? Give your opinion.

Nowadays, trash
foods
which are much
more cheap
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compare
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to high nutrition
foods
are popular among the people who earn lower incomes. Because of
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affects
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of processed
foods
on
human
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body, authorities decided to make regulations on
this kind
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these kinds
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of
foods
and
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the taxes on them. In my perspective
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this
issue, getting more taxes
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unhealthy market products won`t make any impact on people`s decision to buy
those kind
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of
foods
. It would be more ethical and meaningful if the governments
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a new law to lessen the prices of healthy
foods
such
as meat, fruits and vegetables. In
this
way
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people may have
option
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to choose buying nutritional
foods
rather than trash ones. Even though
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economical
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problems for many
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countries,
this
looks like the better option if we are talking about protecting public health from the
damages
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industrial
foods
cause. In conclusion, imposing higher taxes on unhealthy food products wouldn`t solve the main problem. Producing quality
foods
and selling them
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affordable prices will definitely help to get out of
this
loop that people
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going through years by
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