Junk/Street Food is the most affordable meal for the working class. But health problems due to rampant and uncontrolled consumption are being compounded. It has therefore become imperative for governments to impose a higher tax on them. To what extent do you agree to this arrangement by the government? Give your opinion.
Nowadays, trash
foods
which are much more cheap
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cheaper
compare
to high nutrition Wrong verb form
compared
foods
are popular among the people who earn lower incomes. Because of negative
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the negative
affects
of processed Correct your spelling
effects
foods
on human
body, authorities decided to make regulations on Add an article
the human
this kind
of Fix the agreement mistake
these kinds
foods
and increased
the taxes on them.
In my perspective Wrong verb form
increase
about
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on
this
issue, getting more taxes from
unhealthy market products won`t make any impact on people`s decision to buy Change preposition
on
those kind
of Change the determiner
that kind
those kinds
foods
. It would be more ethical and meaningful if the governments make
a new law to lessen the prices of healthy Wrong verb form
made
foods
such
as meat, fruits and vegetables. In this
way
people may have Add a comma
way,
option
to choose buying nutritional Change the article
the option
foods
rather than trash ones. Even though this
solution may costs
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cause
economical
problems for many Replace the word
economic
improving
countries, Verb problem
apply
this
looks like the better option if we are talking about protecting public health from the damages
industrial Fix the agreement mistake
damage
foods
cause.
In conclusion, imposing higher taxes on unhealthy food products wouldn`t solve the main problem. Producing quality foods
and selling them with
affordable prices will definitely help to get out of Change preposition
at
this
loop that people were
going through years by Wrong verb form
have been
years
.Fix the agreement mistake
year
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