The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods. 

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The bar chart illustrates the
amount
of
money
British
people
from different levels of
income
spent on fast
foods
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food
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, and the graph represents the trends
of
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in
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consumption
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the consumption
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of fast food
in
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from
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1970 to 1990. The fast foods mentioned in the graph are hamburgers,
fish
and
chips
, and
pizza
.
Overall
,
people
who have low
income
spent
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spend
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the least
amount
of
money
in
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on
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almost every kind of food. It is very obvious that
people
having high
income
spent
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spend
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their
money
on
hamburger
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hamburgers
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the most, and it is more than
people
who have low
income
pretty much
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apply
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. For
fish
and
chips
,
people
who have
average
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an average
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income
surprisingly spent
money
on it
more
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apply
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than
low
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low-income
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income
people
and even
high
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high-income
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income
people
.
However
, the difference is not much as average
income
people
spent 25 pence per person per week, and
people
from
other level
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another level
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of
income
spent approximately 18 pence per person per week. For
pizza
,
people
who have the most
income
spent 20 pence per person per week;
nonetheless
, it's just a bit higher than
amount
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the amount
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of
money
that
people
from the other level of
income
spent. Starting from 1970,
fish
and
chips
had the most
amount
of
consumption
rate
at around 300 grammes
while
pizza
had the
least
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lowest
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consumption
rate
at approximately only 50 grammes. For
hamburger
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hamburgers
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, the
rate
of
consumption
is
in
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apply
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between
fish
and
chips
and
pizza
, but it constantly increased
,
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and ended up with the most
amount
of
consumption
rate
at more than 500 grammes in 1990. Surprisingly,
eventhough
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even though
,
fish
and
chips
started with the
most
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highest
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consumption
rate
, it ended up
with
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in
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the
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apply
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last
place.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, money, people, income, consumption, fish, chips, pizza, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Expenditure
  • Fast food
  • Income groups
  • High-income
  • Low-income
  • Medium-income
  • Hamburgers
  • Fried chicken
  • Fish & chips
  • Consumption
  • Trends
  • Significant increase
  • Decline
  • Popularity
  • Spending patterns
  • Consumption trends
  • Lifestyle
  • Preferences
  • Prices
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