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Remote working has become more and more common in many countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of remote working?

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Remote working has become more and more common in many countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of remote working?
Popularity
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 of remote jobs has reached a high level in many countries. Certainly,
this
 brings
wider
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the wider
a wider
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opportunity
of
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for
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 choosing
different
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a different
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 kind of
works
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work
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 and give
people
 some freedom to travel or live where they want. One of the obvious advantages of remote working is
ability
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the ability
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 to choose
exact
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the exact
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 kind of
work
 which is more appropriate in terms of
person
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 interests and more lucrative at the same
time
.
In other words
, a wide
opportunity
of
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for
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 profitable and interesting
job
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jobs
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 can be received by using remote
job
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jobs
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especially
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 in
the
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apply
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small or distant towns with a high unemployment level.
For
example
,
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good
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a good
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 programmer from
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a small
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small
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a small
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 Indian city can double
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up
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their
his
her
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a
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his
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 salary being engaged in remote
work
.
Hence
 remote
job
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jobs
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 can bring high profit to
people
 who
have
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do have
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 not good
job
opportunity
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opportunities
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 in the area where they live. Another benefit of remote
work
 is a travel
opportunity
to
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for
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people
. The world can be explored much
easier
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more easily
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 by
people
 who have no strong bounds with exact place.
For
example
, a
lot
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people
 from Russia travel
in
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to
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 Asia only because of
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to
work
 remotely.
Nevertheless
, there are two disadvantages
can
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that can
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 be noted when remoted
work
 is chosen.
Firstly
,
work
 and life balance can be easily lost.
That is
 to say, absence of the office space destroys
borders
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the borders
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 between
work
time
 and other life.
For
example
,
employee
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employees
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not
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are not
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 able to feel free even after
work
time
.
Therefore
, remote
job
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jobs
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 can bring some additional pressure on
worker
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workers
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.
Secondly
,
career
 growth
limitation
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limitations
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 can certainly take place in the case of
remoted
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remote
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work
.
This
 is because distant
people
 are not simply managed and controlled.
Absence
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The absence
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 of trust
eliminate
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eliminates
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 an
opportunity
of
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for
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career
 promotion.
For
example
, one of my friends who is a great programmer is not able to be a project manager in his team because he prefers to
work
 remotely and
reject
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 offers to
work
 in the open space. As
result
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a result
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,
career
 growth is closed to him on
this
 matter.
To sum up
,
although
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the remoted
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remoted
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remote
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 working style has several advantages it
also
 leads to
threat
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the threat
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 of
loosing
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 equilibrium between
job
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a job
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 and regular life,
likewise
block
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blocking
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career
 growth promotion. But if you are
young
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a young
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 person and have a lot of
time
 you definitely should try both ways of
job
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jobs
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.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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