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The graph below shows the annual visitor spend for visitors to new Zealand from 5 countries for the years 1996 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the annual visitor spend for visitors to new Zealand from 5 countries for the years 1996 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line chart illustrates the amount of visitors’ expenditure from five different countries namely Australia,
USA
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,
UK
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the UK
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, Japan and China, when visiting New
Zealand
since
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 1996 until 2014. In general, Australians had the highest spending when coming to New
Zealand
 in all periods,
while
 China had the lowest.
To begin
 with, Australians who visited New
Zealand
 spent the cost higher than the visitors from the four other countries. It exhibited a fluctuating pattern with the highest peak at 2,500
NZ
$ respectively.
In contrast
,
Chinese
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the Chinese
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 nation had the lowest spending which started from almost 0
NZ
$ and ended with below 500
NZ
$, respectively.
Moreover
, USA people were in
the
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second place in spending their money to come to New
Zealand
. It got the peak at 1,750
NZ
$, respectively.
Additionally
, the amount of people’s expenditure from
UK
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the UK
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 and Japan exhibited fluctuating trends. Japanese expenditure started in the third place, but it was passed by the visitors from
UK
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the UK
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at the end
. Both the two countries started from 500
NZ
$ and ended at under 1000
NZ
$, respectively.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words zealand, nz with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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