Many food are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages.

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In the modern day, the advancement of international trade

is allow

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us to

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accessible to various raw materials of

food

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from across the world. Anyway, international shipment

consume

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a lot of

energies

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energy

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that is

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why it creates

lot

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of pollution and it become one of the major issues

causes

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environment

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problems

get

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worse.

Someone

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says

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having local

food

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ingredients is the better

way

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reponsible

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responsible

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the

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nature. Personally, I agree with

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statements

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and I am going to explain what are the advantages and disadvantages of

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controversy.

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with, the first advantage of domestic ingredient consumption is a direct

way

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to reduce the pollution from

oversea shipment

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. Because of globalization, humankind

tend

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to overconsume everything nowadays.

the

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another

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advantage is to reserve local

food

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recipe

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recipes

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and ingredient

knowledges

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knowledge

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, It is the ancient

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of life and

valunable

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valuable

culture. Many people in

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age tend to overlook local

food

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just because they

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that it is

out-to-date

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thing or it is unquality, but in

facts

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, lots of local

ingredeints

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ingredients

are full of qualities and benefits for eating more than people know.

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lots of vegetables which are a herb and

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able to heal some symptoms, unfortunately, many people do not know and spend more money

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expensive imported

food

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materials

instead

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. In conclusion, I believe that eating domestic foods

are

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advantage

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advantageous

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than

consume

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consuming

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imported

food

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it is environment friendly and it is a

way

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to save

the

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our world.

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, overconsumption that happening in the present is not only

unneccessary

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unnecessary

for

human

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humans

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but

also

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harmful environment.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

269 words

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

One long-distance flight consumes fuel which a car uses in several years’ time, but they cause the same amount of pollution. So, some people think that we should discourage non-essential flights, such as tourist travel, rather than to limit the use of cars.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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in some culture the parents arrange marriage for their children but in others people choose their own marriage partner. What are the advantages and disadvantages of each system?

Some people think that schools are more effective if students are allowed to participate in running the school.State whether you agree or disagree.Give reasons for your answer using personal experiences or other examples.